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thanks patrick. well, it points to how haiku show and don't tell i suppose. haiku have a range of how much the reader supplies to "enter" the poetic experience. this one leaves more "space" for reader completion.
i don't think it needs to be stated what you ate... that's not the important part. the important part is that it's the eve of a new year, and you're eating the same thing you ate last time. this poem is a good example of how haiku can paint a complete picture with only the bare minimum amount of words.
I see. I was treating "this last year" as the syntactic unit, rather than "we ate this".
I wasn't interested in *what* you ate.
I genuinely didn't understand your haiku - at all. The lack of punctuation (which isn't a bad thing) got me off on the wrong track. Looking at it again, it makes sense. Had to come back to it the next day.
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happy new year bill,
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nice one! happy new year Bill!
thanks greg and Happy New Year to
you and yours!
bill
nice one ed!
happy new year!
bill
thanks ed.
have a good new year!
bill
Hi Bill,
I can't make sense of this one.
What did you eat last year? New Year's Eve? Did you only eat on New Year's Eve last year?
Anyway, seems that others understood it.
It's me, not you. ;-)
thanks patrick. well, it points to how haiku show and
don't tell i suppose. haiku have a range of how
much the reader supplies to "enter" the poetic
experience. this one leaves more "space" for
reader completion.
happy new year!
bill
i don't think it needs to be stated what you ate... that's not the important part. the important part is that it's the eve of a new year, and you're eating the same thing you ate last time. this poem is a good example of how haiku can paint a complete picture with only the bare minimum amount of words.
thanks greg, well put.
bill
Oh...
I see. I was treating "this last year" as the syntactic unit, rather than "we ate this".
I wasn't interested in *what* you ate.
I genuinely didn't understand your haiku - at all. The lack of punctuation (which isn't a bad thing) got me off on the wrong track. Looking at it again, it makes sense. Had to come back to it the next day.
thanks patrick . . . and not every poem captures
every reader.
bill
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