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Tuesday, December 2, 2008
apple bobbing the scratch of kettle corn
w. f. owen
4 comments:
Anonymous
said...
Not sure whether there is kettle corn in the water, or apples floating in kettle corn, but I like it for just that reason - festive little Haiku.
Also, I can see that your conscious of "kigo words" or phrases. Which would be your kigo, Bill, the apple bobbing or the kettle corn?
well, the kettle corn would not scratch in water. :) i think the apple bobbing certainly is an autumn kigo, though reinforced by the popping of kettle corn. hmm, maybe i should say the popping of kettle corn. yeah, i like that.
4 comments:
Not sure whether there is kettle corn in the water, or apples floating in kettle corn, but I like it for just that reason - festive little Haiku.
Also, I can see that your conscious of "kigo words" or phrases. Which would be your kigo, Bill, the apple bobbing or the kettle corn?
hi patrick,
well, the kettle corn would not scratch in water. :)
i think the apple bobbing certainly is an
autumn kigo, though reinforced by the
popping of kettle corn. hmm, maybe i should
say the popping of kettle corn. yeah, i like that.
thanks!
bill
I like the original for its contrast between the "soft/roundness" of bobbing & apples and the "roughness" of popcorn & scratch.
'popping' is good too, but it loses something, imo.
A warm, autumn poem, Bill. Enjoyed.
popcorn sizzling slowly at first the rain
thank you josh. i appreciate it.
bill
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