This blog is an extension of the ideas presented in my book (Haiku Notebook Second Edition, smashwords.com, 2010). It is intended to be a forum for discussing haiku and haibun. My hope as an educator is to stimulate interest in writing these forms. So, please feel free to post. [NOTE: click "comments" to read poems by other poets, as well as discussion]. Thank you for visiting!
I love the image here, first of all. And I love the structural possibilites the poem invites. One can begin the poem reading "sudden calm, trees point" or, without much strain, one can read "sudden: calm trees point..." Each way works in its own way, of course, and there is pleasure in playing with the possibilities. The breath of the wind through the last four words of the poem is especially nice. I don't think enough of our poems carry the music poems are meant to bear. Thank you for sharing with us.
Thanks Grant. The "music poems are meant to bear" is a sentiment some have used to argue that haiku need to be longer. Longer poems, it is argued, give more words and syllables for rhyme, near-rhyme and, in general, "musical notes" to interplay. With me, I tend to be a minimalist--shortest possible haiku--so "music" is harder to accomplish. Anyway, I'm glad this one struck a chord with you.
4 comments:
never thought of bending of the trees in this way. great!
Thanks Ričardas. Unfortunately, the brisk spring wind is back.
Bill
I love the image here, first of all. And I love the structural possibilites the poem invites. One can begin the poem reading "sudden calm, trees point" or, without much strain, one can read "sudden: calm trees point..." Each way works in its own way, of course, and there is pleasure in playing with the possibilities. The breath of the wind through the last four words of the poem is especially nice. I don't think enough of our poems carry the music poems are meant to bear. Thank you for sharing with us.
Grant
Thanks Grant. The "music poems are meant to bear" is a sentiment some have used to argue that haiku need to be longer. Longer poems, it is argued, give more words and syllables for rhyme, near-rhyme and, in general, "musical notes" to interplay. With me, I tend to be a minimalist--shortest possible haiku--so "music" is harder to accomplish. Anyway, I'm glad this one struck a chord with you.
Bill
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